Name the failure before editing
Choose the narrowest diagnosis supported by the panel context and listener map. Do not treat every marked structure as part of one error.
1. A speaker says “It is the traders who they need a lease.” What fails first?
2. A well-formed cleft corrects a rival that the panel settled three turns earlier. What fails?
3. The listener recovers the 12% rent figure as focal but concludes that it proves causation. What needs repair?
4. The panel accepts the proof-rule problem, but the speaker keeps repeating the corrective it-cleft instead of proposing a remedy. What failed?
Retrieve · Lesson 5 evidence package
Open the unedited panel audio, preparation notes, decision statement, listener map and exact time stamps for one success and one difficult seam.
Transcribe only the prior claim, target turn and following response around the difficult seam.
- Record intended focus, recovered focus, evidence strength and what the next speaker did with the value.
- Keep the original audio and transcript unchanged for the A/B comparison.
Similar listener symptoms can come from different layers
Four fictional panel seams · Original classroom material
Seam A · formation: “It is the proof rule that it may exclude informal tenants.” The intended barrier appears twice: as the focused value and as it inside the relative clause.
Seam B · warrant: “It is the cabin that is step-free.” The form is complete, but every participant already accepts this and the current question concerns the clinic route.
Seam C · calibration: “What the 12% rise proves is displacement caused by the line.” The pseudo-cleft focuses a conclusion the association cannot warrant.
Seam D · release: “What the fare needs is alternative proof. What the proof needs is flexibility. What flexibility needs is inclusion.” The chain keeps resetting focus and never assigns an action.
Match each observation to Seam A, B, C or D.
A Formation
B Discourse warrant
C Evidence calibration
D Focus release
1. Needs the resumptive pronoun removed so the cleft clause contains the required gap.
2. Would improve if the speaker acknowledged the cabin and foregrounded the missing clinic connection instead.
3. Must preserve the rent association while withdrawing a causal conclusion.
4. Needs a neutral clause naming who must establish an alternative eligibility process.
5. Could be grammatically accurate after a minimal structural repair while still needing a separate listener test.
6. Contains possible cleft-like strings but obscures policy action through repeated abstraction.
Use a seven-layer repair order
Repair only the first layer that fails
| Layer | Diagnostic question | Minimal repair |
|---|---|---|
| 1 · Proposition | Are actor, action, source, modality and causal strength still accurate? | Restore the evidence floor before changing focus |
| 2 · Cleft formation | Are copula, wh/relative marker, gap and value complete without duplication? | Repair be, marker, missing role or bare infinitive after does is |
| 3 · Value fit | Does the focused constituent answer the wh-clause or fill the gap semantically? | Replace the value or choose a direct clause |
| 4 · Discourse warrant | Is a rival, open value, limit or reframe active now? | Establish the contrast or remove the marked form |
| 5 · Sequence | Does the focus follow sufficient ground and lead somewhere new? | Move the sentence, add a premise or remove a repeated reset |
| 6 · Prosody | Does nuclear prominence fall on the intended value while the given frame recedes? | Change thought groups or prominence without rewriting a successful clause |
| 7 · Release | Once accepted, does the value become the topic of consequence, evidence or action? | Follow with a neutral clause and responsible actor |
Match each symptom to the earliest layer that must be repaired.
Brazilian-Portuguese transfer remains an evidence question. A similar surface order, discourse frame or prominence pattern may serve a different function across languages. Compare only repeated examples from your own recordings, hold context constant and test listener recovery. If the link is not repeated, mark it unverified.
Repair form, timing and release separately
Correct the named fault. Preserve the dossier evidence and use a neutral clause when marked focus no longer has a job.
1. It is informal tenants who they may lack the documents. — duplicated subject
2. What the drawings omit they are the clinic route. — doubled subject/value frame
3. Alternative proof is that informal tenants need. — reversed marker
4. Where consultation fails is evening and weekend meetings. — value mismatch
5. All the attendance figure does is counts supportive residents. — formation and evidence
6. It is the rent rise that proves the line caused displacement. — evidence drift
7. It is the cabin that is step-free. — fact already accepted; current question is the clinic route
8. What traders need is a lease. What the lease needs is detail. What detail needs is fairness. — failed release
Order the five sentences into a trajectory that earns one marked limit and ends in action.
- That pattern should trigger tenant monitoring before, during and after construction.
- The comparison identifies a distributional concern, but it does not isolate the route announcement as the cause.
- The council should publish thresholds for assistance and the actor responsible for responding.
- Advertised rents near the proposed stations rose 12%, compared with 7% citywide, during the stated period.
- All the current figures do is establish a pattern requiring further investigation.
Prosody-only retest
Choose one grammatically accurate Lesson 5 sentence whose intended value the listener missed.
Test whether delivery alone repairs recovery before rewriting the clause.
- Record Version A with the original thought groups and prominence.
- Record Version B with the given frame lighter and nuclear prominence on the value; keep wording unchanged.
- Ask a blind listener to identify focal value and rival. If B does not improve recovery, retain the result and investigate another layer.
Run an A/B repair on one panel seam
Local repair · Original panel preserved
Use the first time-stamped Lesson 5 seam where intended focus, evidence strength or next action diverged from the listener map.
Revise and retest only that 30–60-second exchange, keeping the prior claim and following response visible.
- Minutes 1–2 · align: mark the first divergence across prior claim, target turn, intended value, listener recovery and following response.
- Minutes 3–4 · diagnose: apply the seven-layer order and select one primary cause. Record a secondary cause only if independent evidence requires it.
- Minutes 5–6 · revise: make the smallest change: repair the cleft, change its family, restore a neutral clause, establish a rival, reorder the turn, recalibrate evidence, move prominence or release the value into action.
- Minutes 7–9 · blind A/B test: present original and revised exchanges in unlabelled order. The listener records focal value, rival, evidence strength and next action for each. Working alone, record and reconstruct after a delay.
- Minute 10 · decide: accept Version B only if recovery improves without changing the proposition or erasing a valid prior contribution.
- Minute 11 · save: retain both exchanges, maps, diagnosis and decision. Convert the accepted result into one conditional editing principle for Lesson 7.
Accept only the repair the evidence supports
Choose the conclusion supported by the retest.
1. Version B replaces a stale it-cleft with a neutral action clause, and the listener now identifies the agreed condition. What follows?
2. A prosody-only Version B produces the same mistaken focal value as A. What follows?
Error log rule
Record original context, wording, listener symptom, first failed layer, revision and retest result. Mark repaired only when the new version improves the targeted recovery and preserves the proposition. Otherwise mark retest. One occurrence does not establish a recurring L1-transfer pattern.
Carry one tested principle into the critical essay
Choose the principle that can guide Lesson 7 responsibly.
1. Which note is appropriately bounded?
Standing informal-input bridge
Return to the saved revision or release point in the long 99% Invisible episode and long-form urban-geography essay. Describe how the source preserves, limits or redirects the claim and what follows once the value becomes shared. Compare that sequence with the accepted Lesson 6 repair. Bring both conditional principles, the Lesson 4 midpoint briefing and the Vista Line dossier to Lesson 7 for the 420-word critical essay.